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Post by Deleted on May 22, 2014 1:43:50 GMT
Well... Just rereading some of the earlier chapters, and holy shit they're so fucking cheesy. Damn. I wrote those? Shit.
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Post by Deleted on May 22, 2014 2:49:28 GMT
GENGAR
"Omid, is there anyone nearby?"
He checked his GPS tracker. "Let's see. The majority of people left are on the opposite end of the island. Two signatures are over here, though. Master Psychic, and an unknown."
"MP oughta do just fine," Rock answered for me, taking a second to wipe the sweat from his forehead as he stepped into the middle of our conversation. Omid gave him an evil eye. Rock appearing next to me like that made me register something. We all looked like shit. For one, none of us had many clothes. All we had were once pants, now shorts, and flip flops made from trash. Everything else was used up. Two, we were all sweaty, sunburnt, and gross. Three, we all had several new scars at least. Big ones, too.
"Heis!" Omid shouted, "You almost ready? I think Rock's done."
"I am," Rock confirmed. "We're waiting on you, dude." Rock clenched his newly finished machete. The makeshift forge used to bend the metal in the right way was still hot.
Oh, and one more thing contributed to my dislike of our looks. We all had explosives on. Despite us removing them days ago, we figured that it would not be wise to piss off a bunch of trained soldiers. Not until we were ready, of course. Discovering microphones inside of the wiring made us all pissed. We kept talking, but in a way that almost sounded depressed to the soldiers, only because we had been focused on writing more than anything else. From what we could tell, no cameras were in any position to spot us.
"I think it's just about done. I'll do the talking. You guys just be ready with your... Ah... 'Tools.'" Heisenberg continued to fiddle with the machinery on the staircase as he spoke. The generator would either blow, work, or both. No matter what, there'd be no second chance.
"What else would we be doing, dude?" Rock was beginning to recover from that initial blow Bio had hit him with, but only his smart-ass qualities had returned as of yet. Not the humorous ones. He clenched his shoulder, and walked over to our only non-weapon creation. He then proceeded to sit on it. Inspecting the blade of the machete, he pulled his finger horizontally across the vertical blade. He did so several more times, in quick succession, before he seemed satisfied. Then he laid back, and clenched the weapon tight. Rock's was the only proper weapon we had made. Mine was still my pistol, so we saw no need to give me another weapon. Omid's was just a sharpened stick we call a spear. Heis lost his weapon earlier than we had hoped, so we gave him a sort of sling, so he could be useful even from his position up high.
I sat next to Rock. Omid sat next to me. This thing wasn't very comfortable to sit on, but it was better than the floor, for sure.
"Gengar!" I perked up at Heisenberg's shout. "Get that shit outta here."
Rock sighed, as he picked it up, and all three of us, him me and Omid, carried it to the beach.
We set the three on a slanted rock, so when the time came, we could just kick it out, and we'd be good. Once we were back inside, Heisenberg said two simple words. The two scariest fucking words I can think of. "You ready?"
He was met with silence. All of us, including him, looked at the floor.
My eyes raised, and met each and every one of theirs. My hand raised straight into the air.
14 DOWN, 13 TO GO.
AN: Rock, just a heads up, I decided to split this into two separate parts.
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Post by Rock114 on May 22, 2014 3:09:04 GMT
You've captured me perfectly. It's nearly an exact recreation of myself in the text. Also, fuck yeah, machete!
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Post by Deleted on May 22, 2014 3:14:01 GMT
Whoops, just fixed a horrible fucking error. Jesus, how did that one slip by?
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Post by Gengar on Jun 29, 2014 4:16:14 GMT
bump XD
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Post by Bioshock Infinite WD on Jun 29, 2014 19:06:22 GMT
I was wondering what happened here, I really enjoyed this.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 30, 2014 3:14:30 GMT
Well what happened was I was offline for a few days after posting the first part of one section I wanted to write, and then I left for a few days, and when I came back, I noticed that not one person commented, liked the post, or anything to show me they wanted it to continue. So I stopped. I figured nobody was interested.
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Post by Bioshock Infinite WD on Jun 30, 2014 4:18:02 GMT
Really? Well, that's actually unfortunate.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 30, 2014 7:20:54 GMT
I'm writing the next part. Rock, if you want a reminder on what comes next, PM me.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 14, 2014 19:28:52 GMT
"When's the next episode coming?"
"Soon."
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Post by Kat on Aug 17, 2014 22:49:27 GMT
I watched the movie recently, It was pretty good this is just me trying to revive this
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Post by Deleted on Aug 17, 2014 22:51:08 GMT
I watched the movie recently, It was pretty good this is just me trying to revive thisI mean, I kinda needed some feedback for the part, and if I remember right, Rock never gave me any. So I kinda forgot about it.
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Post by Rock114 on Aug 17, 2014 22:52:38 GMT
I said it was fine.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 17, 2014 22:56:24 GMT
Shit, did you? Well fuck, I guess I was just being lazy.
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Post by Rock114 on Aug 17, 2014 23:01:20 GMT
Shit, did you? Well fuck, I guess I was just being lazy. Something we both have in common. Slackers ftw.
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