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Post by Master Psychic on Dec 29, 2013 21:34:24 GMT
This is a spinoff of the Walking Dead Comedy Show. In this spinoff, it's summer and Clementine is eleven years old. Lee and Carley send Clementine at a cabin in the woods to spend some time with her relatives: Luke, Pete, Nick, Carlos, Sarah, Alvin and Rebecca. Also there are Kenny and his family, Omid, Christa, Lilly, Larry, Mark and some guys from the 400 Days Comedy Show. Clementine will spend some weeks with her relatives and neighbours and will also have to face with her relatives's bad neighbours, Carver and his daughter Michelle. Though, Clementine has some problems with her relatives like Carlos and Rebecca.
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Post by Master Psychic on Dec 29, 2013 23:07:22 GMT
Here is a bit of the dialogue.
Clementine when she enters in the cabin for the first time and she has her suitcase: Clementine: Hi everybody! And we see her relatives fighting. Rebecca: Goddamnit, I can't stand being in this shithole! Alvin: Rebecca come on, Clementine is going to arrive soon. Rebecca: Shut up, Alvin! Nick: Who the fuck ate the pudding?! I told you all that I was saving it for myself! Pete: I ate it. Nick: Uncle Pete, I told you that I wanted to eat the pudding! Pete: It din't have your name on it so stop being a pussy, boy. Luck: Look, let's just calm down and- Carlos: Who stole Sarah's glasses?! Luke: It wasn't me! Carlos: Yeah right! Luke: Look Carlos, I'm tired of you being a big- Clementine: EVERYBODY! The relatives turn their attention to Clementine. Luke: Oh, hi Clementine!
I will show more dialogue tomorrow.
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Post by IDEK on Dec 29, 2013 23:18:34 GMT
Pete: I eat it
Me: GRAMMAR NAZI ACTIVATE! you mean Ate
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Post by Master Psychic on Dec 29, 2013 23:28:32 GMT
Fixed.
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Post by Teacakes on Dec 30, 2013 16:36:56 GMT
.......
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Post by Master Psychic on Dec 30, 2013 16:41:31 GMT
Yeah, something like that.
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Post by Master Psychic on Dec 30, 2013 17:42:30 GMT
Episode 1: "Clementine's Summer"
At Lee's home, Lee and Carley decide to send Clementine to stay with her relatives because she hasn't seen them for awhile. Lee and Carley tell Clementine that she and the others neighbours like Kenny, his family, Lilly, Larry, Mark, Omid and Christa will go to into the woods with her. Kenny shows up and says that it's time to go. Lee and Carley tell Clementine that they will miss her and tell her to be nice to the relatives and Clementine gets in Kenny's car and Kenny drives away.
They arrive in the woods and Clementine goes into the cabin and sees her relatives fighting. She stops the fight and Luke welcomes her into the cabin although Carlos and Rebecca don't like Clementine. Kenny, his family, Lilly, Larry, Mark, Omid and Christa find three cabins and they move into the cabins. We find out that Kenny came into the woods because he wants to catch a legendary big fish but Katjaa doesn't belive in the legend and Kenny says that he will find the fish. Lilly, Larry and Mark came into the woods because Mark suggested that a vacation in the forest wouldn't hurt anyone. Omid and Christa came into the woods because Christa thought that maybe being in the forest will make Omid forget about their cat being evil and such.
At Clem's cabin, Clementine spends her time by playing the game "Risk" with her relatives and the relatives fight again, with them saying that one of them is cheating. Suddenly, someone knocks at the door and Clementine opens the door and it's a guy called Carver and his daughter Michelle. Michelle is being rude to Clementine and says that her hat stinks which makes Clementine mad. Carver tells Clem's relatives to give him food and Clementine says that they won't do that but the relatives still give Carver food and him and Michelle leave. Clementine is shocked about this and Luke tells her that Carver is rich and they are scared of him because if they don't obey, he will wreck their cabin. Clementine says that they should fight back but the relatives refuse to and Clementine decides to fight against Carver herself and the relatives decide to help her.
We see Kenny fishing, hoping to catch the legendary fish and he doesn't catch anything. Lilly and Mark are relaxing but Larry isn't happy and wants to go home. Omid feels happy that the cat isn't with them and when he looks at the window, he sees the cat and Omid tells Christa that their cat is here and when Christa looks at the window, the cat isn't there and tells Omid to forget about the cat.
At night, Clementine and her relatives are near Carver's cabin. Carver and Michelle are inside and they are sleeping. Clementine enters in the cabin and she slowly takes her relatives's food from Carver's fridge. Clementine and her relatives run away. Carver wakes up and sees that the food is missing and he figures out that it was Clementine and the people from the cabin and he gets angry. He goes to their cabin and declares that by tomorrow, their cabin will be gone but suddenly, Clementine has a gun and aims it at Carver. Carver asks her about the gun and Clementine tells him that her mom taugh her how to shoot and Carver begs her not to shoot him and Clementine pulls the trigger and... Water hits Carver. It's revealed that it's a water gun and Clementine made it look like a real gun and Carver peed on himself when Clementine was aiming her water gun at him and her relatives laugh at Carver and he runs away crying. The relatives thank Clementine for helping them with Carver but Carlos and Rebecca are still not happy with her being around and Luke grabs his sunglasses, puts them on and says to Carlos and Rebecca " You'll just have to deal with it" and they hear someone screaming "YEAH!" much to their confusion.
End of episode.
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Post by IDEK on Dec 30, 2013 17:50:05 GMT
cool-ness.
Omid's cat,
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Post by Master Psychic on Dec 30, 2013 19:38:09 GMT
Anyone else?
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Post by Bioshock Infinite WD on Dec 30, 2013 19:43:51 GMT
Like it.
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Post by Master Psychic on Jan 1, 2014 9:11:34 GMT
Episode 2: "Fishing"
At morning, Pete and Nick decide to go fishing and they bring Clementine along with them. While they are walking in the forest, Pete tells Clementine a story about how Nick peed on himself in his first and last day of school and this causes Nick to yell at his uncle and Pete doesn't care.
They arrive at the lake where Kenny is. Kenny is still trying to find the legendary fish and Pete tells him that he will never find it because it doesn't exist and Kenny says that he will find it and he will have the last laugh. Pete, Nick and Clementine are on a boat, fishing. Suddenly, Carver and his daughter Michelle show up and he orders Clementine, Pete, Nick and Kenny to leave because it's his lake and Clementine protests, saying that the lake doesn't belong to him and Carver shows her a contract which states that the lake belongs to him and he tells them to leave and they do so.
Meanwhile, Lilly, Larry and Mark are in the forest and Larry is complaining and wants to go home. Lilly tells Larry that they came here to relax and enjoy nature and Larry says that if he wanted to enjoy nature, he would of stayed home and watched the Discovery Channel. Omid and Christa are in their cabin and Christa is preparing lunch. While Omid is waiting for lunch, he looks at the window and sees the cat. Omid gets out and he and the cat fight(Peter Vs Giant Chicken Style). Of course, the cat runs away and Omid gets back in the cabin and tries to tell Christa about the cat but Christa doesn't believe him. Kenny goes back to his cabin and tells Katjaa about Carver and the lake and Katjaa tells him not to anger Carver and tells him that the legendary fish isn't real and Kenny says that he will prove them all wrong by finding the fish.
At Clem's cabin, Clementine is angry about Carver and says that he doesn't have the right to control them like this and Pete says that as long as he has the contract, he has the right and suddenly, Clementine has an idea. At night, Carver is swimming in the lake and while he isn't looking, Clementine, Pete and Nick look through his clothes and they don't find the contract and Clem suggests to look for the contract in his cabin. They go to Carver's cabin and inside they see the contract and Michelle shows up and tells them to get out and Clementine says that they want the contract and Michelle says that they will have to get through her and so Clementine and Michelle fight. In the end, Michelle wins but while they were fighting, Pete and Nick have burned the contract meaning that Carver doesn't own the lake anymore. Clementine knocks out Michelle and Clementine, Pete and Nick run away.
At morning, Clementine, Pete, Nick and Kenny are at the lake and they are fishing. Carver shows up and reminds them that the lake belongs to him and when Clementine asks him about proof, he searches through his cabin and can't find the contract anywhere and he comes back and Clementine mocks him, saying that he should of made copies and Carver tells her to shut up and he leaves. Kenny says that he catched something and thinks it's the legendary fish but it's actually a boot and the episode ends with Clementine, Pete and Nick laughing at Kenny.
End of episode.
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Post by Master Psychic on Jan 1, 2014 22:31:32 GMT
Any thoughts?
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Post by Master Psychic on Jan 2, 2014 14:49:28 GMT
Episode 3: "Best Friends Forever"
The episode begins with Clementine in her room, reading. She hears some noises and she turns her back and sees nothing. Suddenly, Sarah is in front of her and Clementine jumps when she sees her. Clementine asks her what she is doing in her room and Sarah asks Clem if they can be friends and Clementine says that she is eleven and she is fifteen but Sarah says that she doesn't care and wants to be friends with her and Clementine says that they will be friends and Sarah wants her to pinkie swear and Clementine does so and Sarah hugs her, saying that they are friends now and Clementine begins to regret it.
In the forest, Omid and Christa are having a picnic and Omid can't find his sandwich and when he looks in the tree, he sees the cat eating his sandwich. Omid points to the tree and Christa doesn't see the cat and tells Omid that he is acting crazy now. Kenny is still searching for the legendary fish and says that he will find the fish and he will be the one laughing in the end. Larry is upset because of some flies and Lilly tells him to calm down but Larry can't take it anymore and he goes in the forest.
In Clementine's cabin, Clementine is eating cereal and Sarah sits next to her. Sarah says that now that they are friends, they will always stick to each other like glue which annoys Clementine. After breakfast, Carlos talks with Clementine and he tells her that if she hurts Sarah's feelings, he will kill her himself which scares Clementine. When Clementine gets out of the cabin, Sarah follows her angering Clementine. In the forest, Clementine meets up with Duck and Sarah shows up, saying that she wants to play with them. Duck says that she should get rid of her but Clementine says that she doesn't want to hurt her feelings and Carlos will kill her. They are playing Hide and Seek and Sarah ruins the game for both Clemenetine and Duck. Next, Clementine and Duck see some birds and are watching them but Sarah loudly shouts and the birds fly away, annoying Clementine again. Clementine is near a tree and there is a beehive, Sarah accidently knocks down the beehive and the bees go after Clementine and she runs away. At the lake, Clementine is hiding from Sarah but Sarah finds her by screaming "Hi BFF!" which causes Clementine to accidently jump in the lake. Kenny hears this and thinks that it's the legendary fish and he catches Clementine instead of the fish. At night, Clementine is near the cabin and before she gets in, Sarah shows up and asks her how she is doing and Clementine snaps and yells at Sarah, saying that they aren't friends and they will never be friends and wants her to get out of her life and Luke shows up and asks about the yelling and Clementine says that it's nothing and she goes back in the cabin and Sarah is sad.
In the next day, Clementine wakes up and feels bad about yelling at Sarah last night and decides to apologise to her. She knocks at her door but she doesn't respond. She opens the door and Sarah isn't in there. Carlos is desperately searching for Sarah and says that Sarah is gone. Clementine confesses that she yelled at Sarah last night and Carlos is about to strangle Clementine but Luke holds him back, saying that Clementine din't mean to do it and they will find Sarah. Clementine says that she will find her and she goes outside to find Sarah. Clementine is in the forest and she searches for Sarah. She finds Sarah in a cave and tells her to come back but Sarah ignores her. Clementine apologises and says that she should of never yelled at her and says that they can be friends if she wants to which makes Sarah happy and forgives Clementine and then suddenly, a bear shows up and the girls are scared. Larry shows up and sees the situation and attacks the bear but Larry is no match for the bear and then Luke shows up and shoots the bear. Luke is glad that the girls are ok and Larry yells at Luke, telling him to call an ambulance.
At night, we see Clementine reading again and Sarah shows up. Sarah apologises for annoying her and Clementine says that it's her fault for yelling at her but they are still friends. Sarah says that they should take a picture together and Clementine agrees and they take a picture together.
End of episode.
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Post by Master Psychic on Jan 2, 2014 18:34:31 GMT
So, any thoughts?
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Post by Teacakes on Jan 2, 2014 18:36:50 GMT
I think there should be more dialogue. It's a bit confusing at times when you are describing what people are saying.
Apart that, tis cool.
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