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Post by Hunter1324 on May 18, 2017 21:15:29 GMT
It was a busy week, sorry I couldn't read it before. Overall I'm really liking how the story is playing out and I really don't know what to expect from now on, I hope that as the series progresses we will get a good look at all the characters in the story.
I do have one slight issue though, I think the text might be a bit too flowery and long for the comic like format, that's generally not a problem on a novel, but since this is a bit of a graphic novel I think the text should flow better and feel more informal.
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Post by Tormundo on May 18, 2017 23:26:58 GMT
That was a nice issue. I liked it more than the first one. I actually haven't read ITF, so I didn't know much about Annie. I think this issue did a pretty good job with characterization, and I'm glad I can just read this without previous knowledge of her. Finn is cool and so is Mal, but my favorite character is definitely Karen. Also, I loved this panel lol: "We agreed you get nothing because you're annoying". Savage.
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Post by jake frost on May 19, 2017 4:32:17 GMT
Issue 4's being a pain in the bum to make (one particular scene) so I might skip a week when ANF 5 comes out. Also trying to balance the Vol 2 promo art because I'm a chronic procrastinator.
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Post by jake frost on May 21, 2017 17:30:06 GMT
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Post by Deleted on May 23, 2017 15:21:49 GMT
This was a really good issue. I liked it more than the last. The cross cutting between Annie and Mal having their chat and Finn and Karen discussing the situation kind of made the whole scene dynamic. I appreciate that you took your time to let these characters team up instead of just forcing them to team up (which would've eventually lead to a dead end where the characters have to act like they're friends all of a sudden). The only criticism I have is that I didn't quite understand the scene where Mal hands Karen the knife (is that what happened?). You need to be aware of the action angle; don't cross that line - it is unnecessarily confusing. The lighting was too dark as well. That scene could've used a little polish, just from a visual standpoint. Oh, and Annie's a cool dog. That middle finger scene made me chuckle. Looking forward to Issue 3 and the new layout, it'll provide a much better flow when reading this stuff.
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Post by jake frost on May 23, 2017 15:52:06 GMT
This was a really good issue. I liked it more than the last. The cross cutting between Annie and Mal having their chat and Finn and Karen discussing the situation kind of made the whole scene dynamic. I appreciate that you took your time to let these characters team up instead of just forcing them to team up (which would've eventually lead to a dead end where the characters have to act like they're friends all of a sudden). The only criticism I have is that I didn't quite understand the scene where Mal hands Karen the knife (is that what happened?). You need to be aware of the action angle; don't cross that line - it is unnecessarily confusing. The lighting was too dark as well. That scene could've used a little polish, just from a visual standpoint. Oh, and Annie's a cool dog. That middle finger scene made me chuckle. Looking forward to Issue 3 and the new layout, it'll provide a much better flow when reading this stuff. Glad you enjoyed - the issues you had are my bad. There's some stuff I had to brighten up in Issue 3 and made a conscious effort to do so, and the camera angles are because I'm not 'formally' trained in cinematography or anything, so it's all kind of self-taught (so some stuff will be a bit rough). Also it's hard to discern between when to be blatant and have a character say what they're doing and when not to when the images are static. It's all a bit weird, but good to know you did get what happened, even if it was a bit of a guess. But enough excuses, I'll try and improve in those aspects as time goes on.
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Post by Deleted on May 23, 2017 17:50:47 GMT
This was a really good issue. I liked it more than the last. The cross cutting between Annie and Mal having their chat and Finn and Karen discussing the situation kind of made the whole scene dynamic. I appreciate that you took your time to let these characters team up instead of just forcing them to team up (which would've eventually lead to a dead end where the characters have to act like they're friends all of a sudden). The only criticism I have is that I didn't quite understand the scene where Mal hands Karen the knife (is that what happened?). You need to be aware of the action angle; don't cross that line - it is unnecessarily confusing. The lighting was too dark as well. That scene could've used a little polish, just from a visual standpoint. Oh, and Annie's a cool dog. That middle finger scene made me chuckle. Looking forward to Issue 3 and the new layout, it'll provide a much better flow when reading this stuff. Glad you enjoyed - the issues you had are my bad. There's some stuff I had to brighten up in Issue 3 and made a conscious effort to do so, and the camera angles are because I'm not 'formally' trained in cinematography or anything, so it's all kind of self-taught (so some stuff will be a bit rough). Also it's hard to discern between when to be blatant and have a character say what they're doing and when not to when the images are static. It's all a bit weird, but good to know you did get what happened, even if it was a bit of a guess. But enough excuses, I'll try and improve in those aspects as time goes on. Well, be happy you have room for improvement, or else it would be boring going forward. This is a neat write-up in that regard though: film110.pbworks.com/w/page/12610163/Axis%20of%20Action
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Post by jake frost on May 23, 2017 18:25:35 GMT
Glad you enjoyed - the issues you had are my bad. There's some stuff I had to brighten up in Issue 3 and made a conscious effort to do so, and the camera angles are because I'm not 'formally' trained in cinematography or anything, so it's all kind of self-taught (so some stuff will be a bit rough). Also it's hard to discern between when to be blatant and have a character say what they're doing and when not to when the images are static. It's all a bit weird, but good to know you did get what happened, even if it was a bit of a guess. But enough excuses, I'll try and improve in those aspects as time goes on. Well, be happy you have room for improvement, or else it would be boring going forward. This is a neat write-up in that regard though: film110.pbworks.com/w/page/12610163/Axis%20of%20ActionAhhh, okay. I've heard of this before but didn't know what it was called, so the write up clears it up.
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Post by jake frost on May 23, 2017 20:05:44 GMT
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Post by Deleted on May 23, 2017 20:22:59 GMT
Oh boi, this is gonna be gud.
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Post by Deleted on May 23, 2017 20:43:08 GMT
Well, this was rather exciting. The new Layout is much more pleasant to read. I suppose there's no way for you to color the back of the Page in black? That's add a more cinematic feel to it. Don't stress yourself though, the new layout was a gift, all things considered. I loved your use of a shallow depth of focus in one particular scene, where they are having the argument about the "test" that Mal came up with (I'm 100% on his side though, you gotta be careful who to trust). It immediately focused the picture on Finn. You should consider doing that more often if it is appropriate. It looks great.
Other than that, that was tense. Finn is fucking things up. He's sort of the Ben of your story, if you will. I can't stand him, but I still look forward to how he is going to fuck things up even more. Annie and Karen have a nice little chat, they grow closer to each other. This is shaping up to be a really interesting, nice, focused little story. I know the characters, I understand their motivations - it is well written, really. Good job on that regard.
I'll keep my fingers crossed for Karen and Annie. I hope they make it out alive.
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Post by Niccc on May 23, 2017 20:43:46 GMT
Finn is such a cunt
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Post by Deleted on May 23, 2017 20:44:17 GMT
I agree 100%
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Post by o0HeaDShoT0o on May 23, 2017 20:46:37 GMT
Good news is this was another good issue and that was a good cliffhanger. I also like the conversation with Karen and Annie.
Bad news is the pictures came out sideways and I had to keep my head tilted the whole time reading it. Not sure why that happened, but I still liked this issue and I'm looking forward to the next.
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Post by Deleted on May 23, 2017 20:47:19 GMT
Good news is this was another good issue and that was a good cliffhanger. I also like the conversation with Karen and Annie.
Bad news is the pictures came out sideways and I had to keep my head tilted the whole time reading it. Not sure why that happened, but I still liked this issue and I'm looking forward to the next. You can just flip the page 90 degrees...?
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