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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2015 18:09:56 GMT
Also, sorry for the delay - but it was caused by the fact that my initial plans regarding the crowbar were a lot different. I wanted the story to be light in tone, but the original scenes were a lot darker and violent towards women, and in the end I decided that my dislike towards women abuse is way too strong to make fun of that. Sorry if you don't agree.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2015 18:15:32 GMT
Well, wasn't that just heart warming?
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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2015 18:18:57 GMT
Well, wasn't that just heart warming? Yeah, especially the dick smashing part. (But seriously - it DID hurt, even though I was just typing) Some things are only meant to be treated nicely.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2015 20:07:42 GMT
I was taking a shit on the toilet while reading this.
Goddamn it.
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Post by Teacakes on Mar 6, 2015 20:16:18 GMT
I love it.
That plot twist, though. Didn't see it coming. I like it.
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Post by Teacakes on Mar 6, 2015 20:18:14 GMT
I want my dick to get whacked by a crowbar now.
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Post by Rock114 on Mar 6, 2015 21:17:47 GMT
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Post by sos on Mar 6, 2015 21:57:52 GMT
Pulitzer worthy.
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Post by Teacakes on Mar 6, 2015 22:32:00 GMT
QUESTION: What was the original plan?
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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2015 22:46:45 GMT
QUESTION: What was the original plan? You were supposed to be Kenny and Theresa wanted the punishment. I don't want to tell you what would you do...
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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2015 22:53:15 GMT
QUESTION: What was the original plan? You were supposed to be Kenny and Theresa wanted the punishment. I don't want to tell you what would you do... Tie her to a bench and pelt her with eggs?
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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2015 22:58:20 GMT
You were supposed to be Kenny and Theresa wanted the punishment. I don't want to tell you what would you do... Tie her to a bench and pelt her with eggs? More like TKA taking his frustration out on her, beating her until she was unconscious. Now you see why it was dropped?
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Post by Rock114 on Mar 6, 2015 23:01:01 GMT
Tie her to a bench and pelt her with eggs? More like TKA taking his frustration out on her, beating her until she was unconscious. Now you see why it was dropped? Yeah. Good call on that.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2015 23:04:20 GMT
More like TKA taking his frustration out on her, beating her until she was unconscious. Now you see why it was dropped? Yeah. Good call on that. Damn straight it was. While it would, in a way, match the story, I didn't think it was funny. Such abuse is not something to crack jokes about.
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Post by Teacakes on Mar 7, 2015 8:28:10 GMT
I like the final version.
Another question: was there meant to be more than one kid? The OP image does say 'kids'
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