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Post by Autobot Sonic on Aug 26, 2014 14:00:50 GMT
Tyler possibly the main character for Season 2? I think that's pretty cool how you ended it with Tyler just like you started it with him. Was that on purpose?
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Post by Deleted on Aug 26, 2014 14:38:26 GMT
Tyler possibly the main character for Season 2? I think that's pretty cool how you ended it with Tyler just like you started it with him. Was that on purpose? Yeah, I came up with the idea of using Tyler for the Epilogue around the time that I finished writing Episode 3.
Also I'm not sure about a Season 2 yet, but I set up the Sanctum plot line in case I make one.
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Post by Hunter1324 on Aug 26, 2014 15:18:41 GMT
I kinda tought that since you said the epilogue didn't had too much to do with the rest of the story it may had something to do with Tyler, wasn't the only theory that crossed my mind tough, tought it may had been a flashback to one of the main characters.
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Post by sos on Aug 27, 2014 6:58:15 GMT
I barely remember this because I read it around 16 hours ago, but SEASON 2 GOTTA BE CONFIRMED.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 27, 2014 11:33:09 GMT
Fuck, I should've let Kenny live. Jane provoked him.
I hate how my Clementine went through the worst possible and ended up in the least secure situation.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 29, 2014 22:46:03 GMT
Still need to read this...............
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Post by Deleted on Aug 29, 2014 22:55:04 GMT
WERE IS SESON 2 DOOD U PROMIZED U WOD RELEASE IT NAO
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Post by Deleted on Aug 29, 2014 23:09:49 GMT
WERE IS SESON 2 DOOD U PROMIZED U WOD RELEASE IT NAO I didn't actually promise XD Still thinking about it, though.
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Post by Rock114 on Oct 10, 2014 19:31:38 GMT
Hey, I finally got around to reading this. Finished it just a few minutes ago.
Awesome story, Jake. You captured the 400 Days characters really well, and even managed to turn Becca into a decent person. That is truly a feat. Gonna start on Season 2 in a little bit. Keep up the good work, man.
Also, that Pete cameo at the beginning of Episode 5? Made my day.
Also also, Wyatt is my favorite.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 24, 2014 1:49:51 GMT
I've started reading this again! With some fairly critical reviews! Hooray!
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Post by Deleted on Nov 24, 2014 2:03:22 GMT
I've started reading this again! With some fairly critical reviews! Hooray! I think you're at the point where I was still being an idiot and not proofreading chapters. Should pick up eventually but if not it might be that I didn't think things through well enough. I'm not really sure how much better it gets but if you can't see any improvement then it's probably not as good a story as people have been making it out to be. I'm surprised that no one else really pointed out any of the things that you did but I agree that Ralph's death was kind of... bleh. Drama for the sake of drama, pulling a Telltale and saying 'someone needs to die this episode and it's going to be Ralph'. The whole Lucia-mentioning-that-she-was-a-nurse-three-times thing was just to ensure that the reader would remember that she was one, and it sort of became a running joke later down the line. I've said before on my art thread or my video thread that I die a little bit inside with criticism but that's because I've never really had any and don't really know how to deal with it. If I rewrite the story at some point I'll surely take your points into account.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 24, 2014 3:17:31 GMT
I've started reading this again! With some fairly critical reviews! Hooray! I think you're at the point where I was still being an idiot and not proofreading chapters. Should pick up eventually but if not it might be that I didn't think things through well enough. I'm not really sure how much better it gets but if you can't see any improvement then it's probably not as good a story as people have been making it out to be. I'm surprised that no one else really pointed out any of the things that you did but I agree that Ralph's death was kind of... bleh. Drama for the sake of drama, pulling a Telltale and saying 'someone needs to die this episode and it's going to be Ralph'. The whole Lucia-mentioning-that-she-was-a-nurse-three-times thing was just to ensure that the reader would remember that she was one, and it sort of became a running joke later down the line. I've said before on my art thread or my video thread that I die a little bit inside with criticism but that's because I've never really had any and don't really know how to deal with it. If I rewrite the story at some point I'll surely take your points into account. Great. There are some points where I just wrote, "Good chapter", but that's because: A) I feel like an asshole criticizing you when I've spent the better part of a month planning and taking notes on (re)starting "What comes after", but haven't written a single word of it, and I also just feel like an asshole in general criticizing anyone for any reason. B) People praise you so much, I assume most of my problems are things that have been sorted out in later chapters. I will say this, some things in general feel a little... rushed, or without detail, I mean, I'm a huge fan of Stephen King, and the biggest criticism people say about his books is that they are bloated, so I guess I've gotten used to reading a story in which everything the characters do are fully described with insane amounts of detail, so it's jarring to see, "Wyatt started looking for meds. Wyatt found meds." Mostly MY problem though.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 24, 2014 8:43:45 GMT
I think you're at the point where I was still being an idiot and not proofreading chapters. Should pick up eventually but if not it might be that I didn't think things through well enough. I'm not really sure how much better it gets but if you can't see any improvement then it's probably not as good a story as people have been making it out to be. I'm surprised that no one else really pointed out any of the things that you did but I agree that Ralph's death was kind of... bleh. Drama for the sake of drama, pulling a Telltale and saying 'someone needs to die this episode and it's going to be Ralph'. The whole Lucia-mentioning-that-she-was-a-nurse-three-times thing was just to ensure that the reader would remember that she was one, and it sort of became a running joke later down the line. I've said before on my art thread or my video thread that I die a little bit inside with criticism but that's because I've never really had any and don't really know how to deal with it. If I rewrite the story at some point I'll surely take your points into account. Great. There are some points where I just wrote, "Good chapter", but that's because: A) I feel like an asshole criticizing you when I've spent the better part of a month planning and taking notes on (re)starting "What comes after", but haven't written a single word of it, and I also just feel like an asshole in general criticizing anyone for any reason. B) People praise you so much, I assume most of my problems are things that have been sorted out in later chapters. I will say this, some things in general feel a little... rushed, or without detail, I mean, I'm a huge fan of Stephen King, and the biggest criticism people say about his books is that they are bloated, so I guess I've gotten used to reading a story in which everything the characters do are fully described with insane amounts of detail, so it's jarring to see, "Wyatt started looking for meds. Wyatt found meds." Mostly MY problem though. I think at the point you're at I was only giving myself a few sentences worth of guidelines for whole episodes so that might be why they're a bit bad. I give myself a little bit more with Episode 4 and the entire of Episode 5 was planned out in paragraphs, so hopefully it won't be as bad. About B), I was getting praise from the start so I guess a lot of people are easily satisfied. I don't know. I'm not sure if so many people can be wrong or not, maybe they were all just going easy on me. And of course, the whole rushed thing; during Season 1 I was giving myself a chapter a day to write (each chapter being ~1200 words) and that meant I had to compress things down. That said if I'm stuck on the same thing for too long my attention tends to wander which kind of explains the to-the-point writing. I was never really a fan of fluff so I only put in what I think is absolutely necessary to keep the story going without it slowing down at an avoidable point.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 28, 2014 15:49:34 GMT
Yay, I finally finished it.
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Post by Hunter1324 on Jun 14, 2015 15:34:48 GMT
Necro for Season's One first anniversary.
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