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Post by Deleted on Jun 6, 2014 4:31:36 GMT
(Okay new people who never heard of this,it's like game of thrones,but totally different. It's about a boy who is called an elfie because he has elfen blood(some elf type thing that is like titans from attack on titan,but they're a lot smaller and different) and has special powers and people are afraid of him except a girl who likes him.there is a bad guy whose name I forgot who wants to kill him and attempts to drown him,but he lives and I discontinued from that point so I'll rewrite the story again.sadly,I'm writing another story,but when the first act is done,which should be soon or so,or I procrastinate the story,I'll write this)
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Post by Deleted on Jun 6, 2014 6:37:44 GMT
(There are minor changes due to the fact I have shit memory and forgot most names and stuff,so sorry.PS,its also like skyrim) The introlouge: 1000 years ago,the earthdom was a lovely place,then the elfen arrived. They were mostly bloodthirsty, but driven by instinct.some were not like most elfen as proven just 20 years ago when a human and an elfen fell in love, and had a child,but both the human and elfen died.before they died,however,their baby was sent down a river and thus the story of castellio was born It was a spring day as many villagers from the hunhuri district picked some apples on trees.a one eyed man named Cyrus fentor was chopping lumber from a fallen apple tree near the castellion river.his friend, varren, was nearby fishing at the river."aye this sun heatin the area up I presume,"he said(they sound Scottish,Irish,and British as well as stereotypical native Americans and russians)"I wonder If the sun god pyros is torturing us with scolding heat today" "Maybe it's the sun gods way of showing love to us with the heliotic powers he has" Cyrus joked "Won't be funny after summer winds come bye. Elfen's will probably find our village from the mountain's side" "Let's hope not then varren." They switched task as Cyrus went fishing.time passed."any bites so far?"varren asked "Nyet,but somethin'll catch sooner or later"suddenly, Cyrus watched the river as a small basket passed near.Cyrus walked in,grabbing the basket and moved the blanket and saw a baby "Catch somethin? "Varren yelled. "Well I caught somethin but not a fish,but a merest child." "Aye!?" Varren said shocked. "Yes,a healthy male with pointed ears." "Could he be an elfen?" Varren said in a scared and worried tone "Maybe,but e doesn't look dangerous,maybe it's hybrid." He said as he read a small note that read keep him safe for us. "Hybrid?well if so,then we must name him. After scratching his stubble appearenced beard,he said"if a name for such from a river,he shalt be named castellio"
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Post by Pimp-Hand Lee on Jun 6, 2014 6:53:31 GMT
Yes!!
Castellio is back in all his glory! Even better this time, long live Castellio!
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Post by Deleted on Jun 6, 2014 8:07:06 GMT
Chapter one 16 elfen years later(14 years) Castellio's face was covered in sweat,coal,and dirt.it was around summer.it was hotter than usual as his guardian,Cyrus,joked about putting his face in the water to cool him off,which seemed like a good idea then.castellio worked at the same place Cyrus works,a smithery and works as a blacksmith making swords,sheilds,and sometimes armor for knights.it was usually after work children would would laugh and call castellio names like Elfie because his elfen ears and sometimes people actually mistook him for an actual elfen.while it was mostly unbearable,one thing that did make it bearable was varren's daughter,via.she was 15 in human years and a pretty girl that castellio liked.the only reason she can't love him is because her mother.Ithya,who is via's mother,doesn't like castellio because when she was a child,she saw her parents killed by elfen.the only reason she hasn't killed him is because of varren,who said castellio is good,but she still doesn't trust him. While walking home,castellio ran into via,who was holding a basket of bread to bring to the marketplace to sell. "Hello castellio," she said "how art thou?" "I am fine,but my lady you are divine" he said replying.she let out a soft chuckle. He then continued"Cyrus actually sent me to get some food at the market,but I think I am lost" "Well then,let me help you"she said.she grabbed his arm and walked to the market with him.some kids called castellio names,so via jokingly said "keep it up you'll get eaten by a real elfen" Upon arrival,castellio got some fish,bread,herbs,and meat,mostly pork.via even snuck a free roll of bread for castellio.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 8, 2014 9:49:12 GMT
Chapter 2 As castellio entered the cabin,Cyrus said"ah,castellio, you're back. Set the basket down near the table.I'll make some göttün soup soon.while you wait,I guess you can practice your swordsmanship skills." "Aye." Castellio replied. It was times like this,castellio read his scrolls about the known science or some literature, but heading to the small shack,retrieving a nice sword,guardsman thin or a brute's fat sword,choose a pick,and wear some wooden armor and fight some men made from leather to relieve anger as if he were attacking hostiles or fencing with people who mocked him.as castellio swung his sword around and onto fake people,he had thoughts of doing a harsh crime in the village,especially as a hybrid of elfen and human-killing those who mocked him.sometimes,like yesterday,kids would peek at him and yell "elfi-" "PISS OFF BASTARDS!!!"as he threw a sword at the fence,scaring kids.his eyes glowed red when doing that,until he realizes what he does."Scheiße,I'm sorry!" He apologize, even though damage is done. Later,at around dusk,it was dinner.everything was fine and quiet.no little children to piss him off and throw swords at fences in anger. "Thanks for the focandle. göttün soup was fine like nectar" castellio told Cyrus. "You're welcome,but you thank the god dyatus for the food not me.he makes harvests and such food happen" Finally the long day is,and was finally,over.castellio blew out the candle
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Post by Deleted on Jul 3, 2014 10:20:12 GMT
Its not much but its something. I'll probably continue sometime this week or next week.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 3, 2014 10:22:50 GMT
Its not much but its something. I'll probably continue sometime this week or next week. The one eyed guy is Cyrus.I wasn't fucking kidding when I said he had one eye.the other guy is varren. Take a guess who the blond kid is...
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Post by Deleted on Nov 19, 2017 3:12:12 GMT
i think i'll rewrite this at some point later instead. this is cringe. i came up with a better plot for this anyways
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